三、范文及点评
自测一
框架搭建：由所给主题和指示内容可知，本文是关于终生学习的重要性，由此可判断本文应为道理阐释类作文。本文基本段落安排如下：第一段简单分析所给哲言，引出“终生学习”这一主题；第二段结合事例说明终生学习的重要性；第三段总结全文，再次强调终生学习的意义，并提出建议或呼吁。
范文
The Importance of Lifelong Learning（1）It is a popular belief that learning is a daily experience and a lifetime mission.（2）With the development of science andtechnology，knowledge is being replacedfaster and faster.In this situation，the importance of lifelong learning（3）cannotbe overemphasized.（4）There are too many successful modelsof lifelong learning.（5）Karl Marx，Fatherof Communism，was known for his persistence in language learning throughout his life.In his fifties，he began to study Russian for work，and could read articles in Russian after only six months.（6）It wasthis ability of lifelong learning that helped Karl Marx become a great man.（7）The famous writer Lu Xun was also a diligent learner all his life.Even he was writing the article one hour before he died.（8）Chinese’srichest man Li Ka-shing is undoubtedly anothergood model of lifelong learning.He has a habit of reading the book every night，and he has kept doing it for decades.（9）From the above examples we can see how important lifelong study is to one’s success.Especially in this ever-changing world，（10）only by continuous learning can we keep up with the development of the times.
点评
本文属于典型的三段式结构，段落安排合理，各段详略得当，举例恰当充分；各段之间过渡自然，各句之间衔接紧密，句型丰富多变；句式和用词上有很多闪光点，主要包括：
（1）表示“人们普遍认为”，常用于引出人们普遍认同的观点。
（2）表示“随着科学技术的发展，知识更新速度越来越快”，常被用作观点背景。
（3）表示“再怎样强调也不为过”。
（4）引出例证常用句式。
（5）举出第一个例子。
（6）It was…that…是强调句型，
本句是强调主语this ability of lifelong learning。
（7）举出第二个例子。
（8）举出第三个列子。
（9）通过例子自然得出结论。
（10）“only+状语”提前，引起句子部分倒装，表示“只有……才……”。
自测二(https://www.daowen.com)
框架搭建：由图画和提示内容可知，本文应为一篇对策方法类作文，其基本的段落安排如下：第一段结合图画描述目前有些父母为孩子包办一切的现象，可简要分析其原因或坏处；第二段给家长提出几点建议，指出应该如何帮助孩子学会独立；第三段可对所给建议进行总结，或提出希望。
范文
（1）As is showed in the picture，nowadayssome parents tend to take on everything and make all decisions for their children，（2）including their study，job and even marriage.（3）Of course，most of them do this out of love.They hope they can give their children the best life and the shortest path to success.However，it（4①）doesn’t help children a lot（4②）but make them become too much dependent.
（5）It’s high time for parents to help their chil-dren develop independence.（6①）Some sugges-tions are as follows.（6②）First，parents should give children chances to make their own decisions，（7）which is a necessary step to be independent.（6③）Second，parents should encourage children to（8①）work out a problem by themselves.If chil-dren meet the problem，parents may teach them methods，but should not（8②）solve it for them.（6④）Third，（9①）to give children increasing responsibility is helpful.Children should understand they are givers to the family（10）but not only takers.
（9②）To grow to be independent is the natural way one has to go through.Therefore，I（11）dohope parents can benefit from the suggestions mentioned above and help their children become a self-reliable person.
点评
本文属于典型的三段式结构，段落安排合理，各段详略得当；句型丰富多变，段与段、句与句之间过渡自然、衔接紧密；句式和用词上有很多闪光点，主要包括：
（1）由图画引出问题。
（2）现在分词短语做定语，首句体现语言功底。
（3）承接自然。
（4）not…but表示“不是，而是”，连接并列结构。
（5）“该是……的时候了”，常用于引出解决办法。
（6）先总后分，脉络清晰。
（7）which引导非限制性定语从句。
（8）“解决”采用不同说法，用词富于变换。
（9）不定式短语做主语，句式富于变换。
（10）but not表示“而不是”，连接并列结构。
（11）do用以强调动词hope，加强语气。