七、每日佳作赏析

七、每日佳作赏析

Directions:For this part，you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Making All Decisions for Children.You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words，and base your composition on the outline given below in Chinese

1.很多家长习惯于替孩子做决定，如选择学校，选择工作等。

2.分析这种现象给孩子带来的影响。

3.你的看法是……

范文

In modern society，traditional patriarchy is still influencing Chinese parents.They（1）tend to make almost all decisions for their children，（2①）from（3①）choosing schools（2②）to（3②）picking up a profession.（2③）Sometimes even many detailed things（4）such as clothing and diets have to be decided by parents.

（5）However，deciding everything for children does（6①）not help them（6②）but harm them in many ways.（7①）On the onehand，it will make children lack independence and initiative，（8）which（9）is unfavorable to their development（10）in the long run.（7②）On theother hand，in many cases，parents’decisions are not always（11）in accordance with their children’s personal ideas and interest.It will make children form resistance and naturally influence their growth.

（12）From my point of view，（13①）it is unwise for parents to make every decision for their children.（13②）It is obvious that parents cannot accompany their children all the time.Growing to be independent is the natural way for everybody.Therefore，parents should give their children rights to make their own decisions.They can help their children（14）but not replace them to make choices.

点评

（1）意 为“易 于……，有……倾向”。

（2）针对all decisions作进一步说明，富有层次感。(https://www.daowen.com)

（3）都表示“选择”，用词富于变化。

（4）表示列举。

（5）转折引出下文，使上下文过渡自然、衔接紧密。

（6）意为“不是……而是”，用于连接并列成分。

（7）意为“一方面，……。另一方面，……”。

（8）which引导非限制性定语从句。

（9）意为“不利于”。

（10）意为“从长远来看”。

（11）意为“与……一致”。

（12）用于引出个人观点。

（13）it充当形式主语。

（14）意为“而不是，而不要”。