三、每日佳作赏析

三、每日佳作赏析

Directions:For this part，you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Internet and privacy.You should write at least 120 words，and base your composition on the outline given below in Chinese

1.网络几乎已经渗透到方方面面，包括个人隐私。

2.网络会对个人隐私产生哪些影响？

3.应该如何保障网络上的个人隐私？

范文

Internet has（1）penetrated into all the aspects of our life and work.（2①）We can study and work by it；we can find a job by it；（2②）wecan communicate by it；（2③）we can entertain by it；（2④）we can buy and sell by it.We can do almost everything on the Internet，（3）almostanywhere anytime.

（4）However，while providing services for us，Internet is（5）inevitably invading our privacy（6）to some degree.The services on most websites require our registration.If we want to enjoy these services，we have to provide much private information，（7）including our name，gender，address，telephone number and sometimes bank account number.（8）Due to（9）the pooradministration and weak security，our information might be open，stolen or sold on the Internet.（10）Even sometimes the information will be（11）misused by the criminals.

（12）Considering the above-mentioned，we must（13）enhance the alertness（14）when using the Internet.First，when we need Internet service，we should try to log on those big legal websites.Second，if the service requires important private information，you should（15）think twice before you type it in.

点评

（1）意为“渗透进”。

（2）排比句，结构相同，增强气势。

（3）注意两个副词的使用。(https://www.daowen.com)

（4）意为“然而，与此同时”，转折引出网络的弊端。

（5）意为“不可避免地”。

（6）意为“在某种程度上”，限定词的使用使表达更加严谨。

（7）现在分词短语充当后置定语。

（8）意为“由于，因为”。

（9）学会使用抽象名词。

（10）表示递进，条理清晰。

（11）意为“滥用”。

（12）意为“鉴于以上论述”。

（13）意为“提高警惕性”。

（14）现在分词短语，使表达更加简洁。

（15）意为“三思而后行”。