一、“造句”原则
1 句子应紧凑连贯
句子中各成分之间要衔接紧密、连贯并富有条理。我们可以通过关联词语引导从句或并列句来体现句子的内部关系,也可适当使用分词结构和一些独立的短语或是插入语成分来代替从句。此外,句子之间还要注意指代、时态、语态、人称和数等方面的连贯和一致。
如:原句:Teenagers are pressured by school work and they are also encouraged by their peers,and under these,they resort to smoking,and sometimes they fell a little guilty.
优化:Pressured by school work and encouraged by their peers,teenagers often resort to smoking,though they feel a little guilty sometimes.(优化后的句子结构紧凑、意思连贯。)
原句:The following ways can be adopted to improve our study efficiency.First,you should make a detailed study plan.
优化:The following ways can be adopted to improve our study efficiency.First,we should make a detailed study plan.(改成we后,与前面的our在人称上保持一致。)
2 句式应 有变化
一篇文章要使人觉得内容丰富、语言生动,就应该重视句式的变化,如主动句和被动句搭配使用、适当穿插倒装句和强调句等特殊句式。另外,不要一味地使用常见的“主语+谓语”的开头方式,可以适当搭配以分词、副词等开头的句式。
如:原句:They say that people obtain most of their knowledge through reading extensively.
优化:They say that it is through reading extensively that people obtain most of their knowledge.(优化成强调句型。)
原句:The competition is becoming increasingly fierce,so it is more difficult to find a job than before.
优化:With the competition becoming increasingly fierce,it is more difficult to find a job than before.(介词短语开头。)
3 句子表达要简洁
造句时,要注意避免赘言重复。只要意思表达清楚,多余的词语就没有必要了。有的考生有时纯粹为了凑字数,加上了一些不必要的成分,而导致语义含混不清、啰唆冗长。
如:原句:I think Gone with the Wind is one of those good films which I enjoyed watching very much.(https://www.daowen.com)
优化:Gone with the Wind is a film I enjoyed very much./I enjoyed the film Gone with the Wind very much.(将多余的成分去掉后,句子表达更加简洁。)
4 长短句要结合
在写作中,一味地采用长句或短句都是不可取的,要将简单句和带有衔接词的复杂句交替使用,这样才能够使文章句式丰富、富有节奏感。
长句含有许多修饰语,适合表达准确而复杂的思想,解释观点或理论,描写细致的事物。写作时,考生要注意前后句子之间是否存在联系,善于发现各简单句之间的关联,用恰当的连接词将简单句连接起来,组成准确地道的复杂长句,增加文章的气势。
如:原句:Lies do harm to those who are being told.Lies also do harm to those who tell them.
优化:Lies not only to those who are being told,but also to those who tell them.
原句:Natural resources are very limited.They will be exhausted in the near future.This idea is not true.But it becomes a major concern around the world.This is a widely accepted fact.
优化:It is widely accepted fact that there is a major concern around the world for the exhaustion of limited natural resources in the near future,though the idea unlikely to be true.
长句固然能表达出复杂而缜密的思想,但如果片面追求复杂句式,华而不实,反而成为表达的累赘。因此,写作中句子的长短应根据表达的需要,有话则长,无话则短。
短句比较简洁、明快、有力,适合陈述重要的事实或想法。短句不仅指句子长度较短,也指句子内部结构精炼。
如:原句:Many automobile parts that are made of plastics and other synthetic materials do not last long.
优化:Many automobile parts made of plastics and other synthetic materials do not last long.
原句:He didn't have enough experience,which is the reason why he didn't do the work well.
优化:He didn't do the work well for lack of experience.
5 少用问句,尽量不用感叹句和祈使句
有些考生喜欢开篇问一连串的问题,想以此引起阅卷老师的注意。一般来讲,一篇作文中可以偶尔出现一两个问句,太多则会适得其反。
感叹句和祈使句,多用于口语之中,不太适宜在正式的书面写作中出现。尽管在抒发感情和发出呼吁时也可以使用,但多数考生对这两种句式的把握能力不够,因此我们建议考生尽量不要使用。